I’m creating an event similar in start to the official Halloween event

[Neo-enclave]

 

EVENT canceled 

 

Here’s a link:

My plan for this event are for me too

1. is to have a ghostship bring my flagship the eclipse over

2. I send some people over to investigate and they vanish

3. I fire upon the mysterious vessel but nothing happens

4. I then Notice a fleet of ships from the past crewed by the dead (these ships are just strong but can be damaged by ship weapons)

5. Call for help

6. Help arrives including my other battleship/half carrier who can provide air support and reconnaissance 

7. Engage in a massive naval battle

8. Board the flag ship an ww2 era aircraft carrier and kill their admiral (which will only be spotted once I think The threads progressed far enough and cause the rest of the ships to fade away until next year)

Plan change:

I’m not using any paranormal creatures now

 

 

Edited November 15, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[North Dniester]

Uhhh... this is basically the exact same thing...

Edited November 9, 2018 by North Dniester (see edit history)

[Salvia]

I mean, i could see a battle rp happening, but not against a ghost navy.  As @North Dniesterjust mentioned, that’s taken.

[Neo-enclave]

 Edit: not using any supernatural creatures

Skeletons aren’t and I like them more so thank you for that one. They are qlso easier write a fight with.

Edited November 9, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[Salvia]

Just now, Neo-enclave said:

Skeletons aren’t 

Skeletons? You do realize this isn’t a fantasy land... its irl except, ya know, in Europa

[Neo-enclave]

It’s a HALLOWEEN event for those like me since was told not to post on the official HALLOWEEN event.

Edited November 9, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[Salvia]

3 minutes ago, Neo-enclave said:

It’s a HALLOWEEN event for those like me since was told not to post on the official HALLOWEEN event.

It is still a rip off of the Dolch Sea RP

[Neo-enclave]

I Don’t care if it’s a rip-off If I wasn’t able to participate and therefore

 

However,

I DO care if I can write a readable story 

Edited November 9, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[Neo-enclave]

Also it not that rare of a set up

[Fulgistan]

4 minutes ago, Neo-enclave said:

Also it not that rare of a set up

Having ghosts and the undead appear in a modern tech, realistic, non-magical fictional setting isn' that rare? I don't buy that.

[Neo-enclave]

It’s also ships from 200 years ago now where did the dolce sea thread have those and a carrier from the hay day of carriers

[Neo-enclave]

If you read it you’d know

[Neo-enclave]

What I wrote includes a description of a ship bearing a flag not used since before the reveal of the Enclave that’s centuries ago

[Fulgistan]

Buddy, I've read the thread. It didn't take long, because it was about two paragraphs long and, in large part, unreadable gobbledegook. You've clearly ripped off the Dolch See thread, which, while supernatural in nature, is also mod-okayed and features one of our RP moderators, @Adaptus, consulting on it, features long, well-written RP and is also clearly delineated (big word, delineated, you might wanna break out a dictionary) between canon and non-canon. This fulfills none of those requirements.

[Neo-enclave]

You do realize this is my first real RP intended for multiple people

[Neo-enclave]

Also when one is uninvited from a party they should throw their own

and I’m here to get consultion on what I should do and I’ve yet to recieve any.

Edited November 9, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[Fulgistan]

"Throw your own party" doesn't mean "create an inferior copy of a thing that already exists". You're not showing any initiative in creating something original by doing this.

[Prymont]

9 hours ago, Neo-enclave said:

and I’m here to get consultion on what I should do and I’ve yet to recieve any.

Here's some consultation then.

Don't.

Come up with your own idea. Don't copy paste from others. 

You have been given tips, pointers, and advice about your writing multiple times by multiple members, myself included. Your writing has not improved. 

Take some time to look around the forums at the quality of writing expected, and try your best to imitate it. Currently, you're at a very low level of writing, which means very few people will want to write with you. Copying the idea from an existing high quality thread further reduces the amount of prospective writing partners.

Listen to the advice people give you.

[Seylos]

The thing about the Mystery in the Dolch See is that it isn't actually paranormal. Nothing that has happened so far in the RP has been out of the realm of possibility.

• Starting in my news post a group of unknown pirates attack a Royal Navy ship with no survivors to find a connection.
• A frigate sized vessel with no identification is pursued by a Royal Navy destroyer before disappearing into a harsh storm.
• A freighter was destroyed, and the other freighter's crew kidnapped.
• 3 ships have engaged an enemy ship under similar mysterious circumstances, and while it is a scrappy ship apparently, it is taking damage and dishing it out it a realistic manner.
• Nobody connected to these vessels is anything other than human, but the way it is written is more akin to them appearing to have supernatural connections of some sort.

On top of this the Dolch See RP is going to have a clear canon ending, with a continued non-canon ending that will delve into the supernatural as our heroes fight it. Being non-canon of course this ending won't effect anything that happens in the real world. The canon ending is supposed to explore who the people behind these attacks are and why they are trying to make it happen and unraveling the conspiracy.

Your RP begins with a similar premise of spooky ships doing spooky things, but then jumps straight into skeletons and ghostly ships from 200 years ago. I can't think of any way this can be canon than if for some reason Enclave citizens find sailing old ships for a giant festival while dressing up as skeletons as a fun things to do.

All I can say is you can try some sort of spooky special, but it has to stay within the realm of possibility, and maybe as a first serious RP it could be confined to your border, maybe something to do with the fact your military recently razed its own capital.

[Neo-enclave]

I’m actually changing my plan from skeletons to people I’ll just imply that somethings wrong about them.

[Seylos]

I think one of the most important question to answer right now is where did 100 ship fleet of elderly sailing ships and ironclads come from. It's one thing to imply there can be a ship here or a ship there and not really have to justify their existence because of their small presence but an armada of that size I think needs to have at least some explanation OOC of where it's from.

[Neo-enclave]

3 hours ago, Prymont said:

Here's some consultation then.

Don't.

Come up with your own idea. Don't copy paste from others. 

You have been given tips, pointers, and advice about your writing multiple times by multiple members, myself included. Your writing has not improved. 

Take some time to look around the forums at the quality of writing expected, and try your best to imitate it. Currently, you're at a very low level of writing, which means very few people will want to write with you. Copying the idea from an existing high quality thread further reduces the amount of prospective writing partners.

Listen to the advice people give you.

I forgot the part in the other thread where a bunch seemingly brand new ships from different eras in the past attacked a battleship.

[Prymont]

@Neo-enclave

Being sarcastic won't get you anywhere, pal. You know full well that you copied the idea from the existing Dolch See thread. This is a poorly executed imitation. Stop it.

[Neo-enclave]

Your are confusing resemblance with plagiarism

You don’t own something having an abandoned creepy ship or a naval battle

Edited November 9, 2018 by Neo-enclave (see edit history)

[Neo-enclave]

3 hours ago, Seylos said:

I think one of the most important question to answer right now is where did 100 ship fleet of elderly sailing ships and ironclads come from. It's one thing to imply there can be a ship here or a ship there and not really have to justify their existence because of their small presence but an armada of that size I think needs to have at least some explanation OOC of where it's from.

I intend it to be a fleet of those who have fallen in the sea over the years but I might not mention that to add to the mystery.